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| Subject: My Writing Wed Nov 03, 2010 3:55 pm | |
| Please read and critique.
Models, Photoshop, Airbrushing. These are just some of the words that come to mind when I see an advertisement. No matter how much we as a society try, there is no way one can escape the invasion of media advertisements that have become ingrained in our modern culture. The worst of these are the advertisements we see on television and in magazines.
Eating disorders are by large the most dangerous consequence of these media messages, by causing society to want to mimic these thin and attractive yet unrealistic idols the media portrays as real life, whereas in fact they have been heavily manipulated with photo editing techniques. A study of 4294 television networks in America found that 1 in every 3.8 commercials displayed on the network sent out some form of "attractiveness message" as cited in Myers et al. This is a major concern for parents and guardians of children who watch an average for 3-4 hours of television every day as these adverts send out messages that say these children are imperfect and need to change who they are to be accepted into their society. A study done in 1991 found that 81 percent of 10 year-olds are afraid to be fat, this can have both positive and negative connotations, it is positive as it obviously lowers the obesity rate in today's children, but for all the wrong reasons. Children are not scared of being fat because of the massive health risks associated with obesity, but for their own self image and the image their peers have of them which has an extremely negative effect on the mental wellbeing of our children, which can in extreme cases result in the child needing psychological help, costing the country millions of dollars annually. Now, nearly 20 years later not much has changed, if anything the effects of media have increased substantially over time as the new generation see their parents, the original mass media generation, being influenced by these media messages.
The media reflects a large or even slight curvy figure in females as a bad thing, showing that "conformity is king" and being an individual is a crime. A lot of this has caused many teenagers to strive for the ideal body shape, making them unhappy with their current body shape and crave to change it, often resulting in irreversible damage to their bodies and psychological wounds that will never heal such as dangerous conditions like Depression, Anorexia and Bulimia. Anorexia and Bulimia are both eating disorders usually not seen without the other, and are extremely dangerous diseases, resulting in chronic malnourishment, even sometimes resulting in death due to the lack of nutrient intake caused either consciously or subconsciously by either of the diseases, yet again costing the country's medical system massive amounts of money to support these problemed teens
Music videos are without doubt, one of the most common media influences teenagers of today enjoy watching. The messages these videos put out are not only the image of attractive women with a desirable figure, but the image of a man surrounded by these perfect women mostly in revealing lingerie, dancing in a seductive way. What kind of message is this sending out to the youth of today? That to be loved, women have to let men have control over them and their bodies, that men get to sleep around and have whoever they want. There has already been an increase of teen pregnancy in recent years; this could be the result of media messages. This is an extreme example of the moral decay of society that our ancestors worried about so much, but were idly dismissed as "old people", and now society is paying the price.
This is not what we want teenagers and children thinking, thinking that they must have the perfect body shape, plastered on plastic faces and lack of clothing to be loved and wanted. Despite our inability to control what the media shows us, we have the power as a society to control how it effects us.
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Nov 14, 2010 9:07 am | |
| Nice One Shonny | |
| | | tikirose Pro
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Nov 14, 2010 3:54 pm | |
| I got an excellence for it. | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Mon Nov 15, 2010 9:05 am | |
| Choice You Should Help Me With My English | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Wed Nov 17, 2010 12:11 pm | |
| It'd help if I knew who you were | |
| | | tikirose Pro
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Wed Nov 17, 2010 12:29 pm | |
| LVL 3 English Creative Writing - Merit
The sun slowly set. The birds stopped whistling, and the crickets started to chirp. The faint chill of night was coming in as a blanket of ebony and stars engulfed the sun-kissed summer sky. Children that were playing on the street earlier were now being put into bed, and adults discussed their day while watching TV.
Among these children was twelve year old, Epithphone. She was a beautiful young woman. The moon illuminated her midnight black hair framing her pale face as she slept. When Epithphone is awake, she’s just like every other girl; playful, active, a good wholesome girl. However, while she’s asleep, she is someone different, her abusive past comes out of her subconscious, and tonight would be no different.
Epithphone’s eyes began to move behind her eyelids as she entered REM sleep, and she began to get restless. Her hands shook, and clasped tightly around her blankets. A cold sweat formed, and she tossed and turned as she dreamt about her past.
A six year old Epithphone clung her fluro-orange coloured oversized, over stuffed jacket close to her. From a distance, she looked like a poofy road cone. Her older sister always made her wear the jacket to and from school, so she could be easily seen and found. Epithphone sniffed, as the early winter cold bit at her sun-kissed skin.
A bright blue station wagon pulled alongside her as she walked. Epithphone wasn’t allowed to talk to strangers, but she knew this man. He was at her home sometimes, most of the time it was before her daddy got home from work. The man was a good friend of her mums.
Epithphone tenderly climbed into the car, dropping her bag by her feet. The man started to drive on, towards her house. She sat there calmly talking to the man about school, and all her friends. She wasn’t paying any attention to where she was going.
As they pulled to a stop, Epithphone looked around. They were in the car park to the forest walkabout that was nearby her place, only about two blocks away she guessed. Epithphone started to tell him how to get back to her place, thinking he must have gotten lost. He just looked at her a pulled a knife from his pocket.
The dream skipped. Epithphone sat upon her older sister’s lap, being held closely. Still wearing her jacket, now torn, with stuffing coming out of it. Her arm lightly bleeding through the stitches still. She really wanted to see her mum, but her mum couldn’t even look at her, she didn’t want to be near her. Her mum had booked into a hotel with her daddy for the night, left Epithphone and her older sister at home, and refused to go home.
Epithphone slowly opened her icy blue eyes to the morning sun that shined through the cracks in the curtains. She yawned, rubbing her hands on her eyes. A cold liquid rubbed off her hands and onto her soft skin. She blinked, adjusting her eyes to the morning.
Looking down she saw red. Everywhere. Tears stung at her eyes, as realisation hit her. The red blood trailed down her snow white skin of her bone thin arms. She stood, her pyjamas clung to her body, soaked with blood. Shakily she walked to her room, the bed was made, and everything was in place, except a family picture. It lay on the floor, smashed.
Quickly, she ran to her parents’ room, and saw the worst. Her mum lay on the floor, her chest cavity torn open and heart stabbed with a piece from what looked like to be the picture frame. Epithphone kneeled next to her mother, clasping her hand tightly, as tears washed the blood of her face.
As Epithphone kneeled, she saw a figure hanging off the side of the bed. There, her daddy lay; his mouth gaped open. She hugged him tightly to her, and cried even harder. The cotton from his throat dislodged from the sudden movement, and lolled out onto the floor. Epithphone jumped from the sudden movement, pulling her daddy off the bed, landing onto the floor with a thud.
Footstep sounded from down the hall. Epithphone froze. She backed up against the window, causing the blinds to open, and the light to shine in; the blood glistened in the sun. As she looked up, she saw her sister, standing at the door. Her sister looked down at the floor. And screamed.
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Wed Nov 24, 2010 10:36 am | |
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| | | tikirose Pro
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Thu Nov 25, 2010 2:09 pm | |
| Lol, soz. I thought you were "King of Darkness" Lol | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:04 am | |
| One more chance
I don't know what to do All I can think about is you I can't get you off my mind and leave what we had behind How you moved on so easily to me, it's still a mystery Just one more chance is all I ask I can show you we can last Forget the other chick, she ain't worth you I'll be everything you need, and more too So all I ask is for one more chance Please leave the old me, behind in the past | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:05 am | |
| Cupids Arrow
My love for you knows no limits With you I will have no secrets If you take me back, I will show That my love for you is stronger than cupids arrow | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:05 am | |
| Now you're gone
When you left me, I didn't know what to do I thought I could never live without you Your words of the past have given me strength to stand But I still want you here, holding my hand Since you have gone, a lot has seemed to change But there are things that still remain the same I still love you more than anything and knowing I hurt you, still causes me pain I'd love to see your smiling face look upon the man, I'm trying to chase You are the reason my heart still beats Maybe one day, it will be yours to keep But for now, I'll just keep trying And wipe away these tears, that I've been crying. | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:06 am | |
| Alone
You left me alone, in this cold dark place Broken hearted, tears down my face You left me alone, in this cold dark room Broken hearted, life filled with gloom You left me alone, but I forgive you For if I was you, I'd leave me tooY ou left me alone, but I'll survive For to earn back your love, I will strive. | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:06 am | |
| Home
I'm sick of used, I don't like it one bit I can't do it anymore, maybe I should quit I hate feeling like this, but I can't stand being alone So for now I'll just sit here, in the dark pit, I call home... | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:07 am | |
| You are
You are my angel, shining bright in the darkness, you give me light You are my knight, in shining armor with you around I couldn't feel safer You are my baby, laying in my arms keeping you safe from any harms You are my daddy, watching over me this my heart, and here is the key | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:07 am | |
| Heart
Theres a warm place inside, it is a heart A difficult place to enter, cold from the start If you are so lucky, to enter this place Treat it with care, as it will start to race If you mistreat it, it will start to break And for it to heal, an eturnity it will take So take my heart, treat it with care As I take yours, and hold it near | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:08 am | |
| Forgive me
I didn't know what to do at first, the pain I couldn't take I just hope I can make it up to you and that it's not to late I'm sorry for all the pain I caused, I really didn't mean to hurt you I was just so lost and didn't know what to do Please forgive me, I hope you haven't changed And please forgive this poem, I know it's awfully lame | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:08 am | |
| Forever
When I first met you, I didn't know what to do I thought you were a miracle, a dream come true Now I see that we're meant to be Forever together, just you and me | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:09 am | |
| Why?
Why do I miss you when you're not there Why do I love you, even if you're not here Why can't I forget you, no matter how hard I try Why can't I turn away and wave goodbye. | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:09 am | |
| I love
I love you more than anything the light of the sun the smell of spring I love you more than anyone my family, my friends even my mum I love you more with each day I don't know why just don't go away | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:09 am | |
| Waiting for you
I daydream to be with you dreaming of the day you say I love you too I wish upon the stars for you and await the day for my wish to come true | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:09 am | |
| Gone
you took my heart and tore it in two and yet I still can't live without you I want you so much, but now you're gone perhaps I should give up, and just move on... | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:10 am | |
| Love
The love I feel Is so real and that's not going to change The love I share Is always there and that will always remain | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:10 am | |
| Why Bother?
Why bother, when I know you don't care Why bother, when I know you're not there Why bother, when I know I don't matter Why bother, when I know I'm just the latter
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:10 am | |
| Smile
I want to be the one to make you happy I want to be the one to make you smile I can be the one to make you happy Even if it takes a while. | |
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| Subject: Re: My Writing Sun Jul 17, 2011 9:10 am | |
| Time:
Time may pass Things may change But my love will last My feelings remain | |
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